Tuesday, September 1, 2009

My First Day At College

Tamarkis Taylor
September 1, 2009
My First Day at College

Monday, August 17, 2009 was a beautiful day. The skies were blue, the sun was shining bright, and the birds were singing. Monday, August 17, 2009 was the first day to the start of a four year journey towards a college diploma. I had been looking forward to this day for many years, and it was finally here. I had mixed emotions about this situation. I was very excited, but at the same time I was also a little nervous.
My first class was at 9:30 A.M. that day, so I got up bright and early that morning. After eating a delicious breakfast of cheese grits, bacon, and some orange juice, I then got dressed. I put on my brand new black Polo by Ralph Lauren shirt, with my beige cargo shorts, and my brand new Nike high-top tennis shoes with black Nike socks to match. I also had some Ralph Lauren cologne to go with this magnificent ensemble. I then proceeded to pack my books for the day into my brand new Jansport book bag. I only had two classes that day, so I didn’t have a heavy load to carry. But, in all of my excitement, I had to go back and get my book bag when I noticed I didn’t have it after getting in my car to drive off.
When I was getting ready at home, I was excited and anxious, but as I was driving down the road, I began to get nervous. I had to take the interstate, and my first thought was traffic. I was scared that there was going to be a horrific accident on the busy interstate and that I would be late on my first day. I was very relieved when I saw that the interstate was not as busy as I thought it was going to be, and the drive down was a breeze. All of my favorite songs came on the radio, and I began to grown excited and anxious again. When I drove up on the Macon State campus, that terrible feeling came back again. I saw all of the cars and thought to myself frantically, “Oh no!, what if I can’t find a parking spot and be late to class after all.” Luckly, I found an excellent parking spot that wasn't too far away from where I needed to be.
There were a lot of all kinds of people there. Young teenagers, and older men and women. When I arrived at my 9:30 class, I was very glad to see two of my friends from high school. My professor was very nice and cordial. She introduced herself and explained very clearly what the class was about and what was expected. The room we were in was very cold, and as my professor continued her precise conversation, I began to get very sleepy. During the course of the rest of my day, I saw some more of my friends from high school. My next two professors were also nice. I began to get kind of worried when my History professor told us that reading is a major part of this class. I guess I'll have to get used to reading more because I want to pass.
In conclusion, my first day of college turned out to be okay. I went from being excited and anxious, to nervous, and then to calm when I realized that everything was good. My first day was a great experience, and I hope that I will continue to enjoy it and be successful.

8 comments:

  1. I can also relate to your topic starting school for the first time did fill daunting, I enjoyed and under stood your blog :)

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  2. Your purpose was very straight forward, but toward the end it got very quick and abrupt. Overall I thought it was well explained and you did a good job of describing that first day! Good job!

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  3. I think your audience is very clear: Other college students! All of them would understand perfectly well what you're going through. Other readers might include future students or parents, I think this essay is well written for them, too. You did a good job of being unassuming who you're reader is. uh. 10 out of 10?

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  4. Not quite 10 out of 10 yet, but close. I do agree that the ending was a bit abrupt. See what you can do to work on that last paragraph. It was nice to see a paper with development and conscientious commentary! Good work here all way round!!

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  5. I like this essay; your first day was sure better than mine! Your ending, as others said, was a little abrupt. However, with a little bit of tweaking your essay could be absolutely wonderful! Consider checking out a thesaurus (Microsoft Word actually has one integrated into it; you can highlight and right-click a word and there is an option for the thesaurus) and replacing some generic adjectives such as 'nice' or 'good' with more varied ones, for a more exciting reading experience.

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  6. Your essay was clear and very descriptive. I really enjoyed reading it. I understand your purpose and who your audience is. I do agree though that the concluding paragraph could we "spiced" up more. Overall it was a very good descriptive essay:)

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